[Comic] DSOF #10 [05-24-08]

[Tapewolf]

Just. Shoot. Me.

It's been over a week, and I'm about ready to set fire to something. Here's the abridged version:
-1 day installing Gimp (Which I couldn't find scanner drivers for.)

IIRC GIMP under Windows just uses the normal TWAIN system.  Unless of course, Windows has moved on and no longer uses that anymore... I wouldn't know, as it's been about 15 years since I've had to scan anything under Windows.
Under Linux it gets more... interesting 

Now, as for the comic, not too shabby.  It could be better, and since you seem to be making changes already, #3 should be interesting to see.

Jade is curious.  Her face resembles a cheetah, but without the spots.  Also, she seems to have slit eyes like a domestic cat, which AFAIK cheetahs don't.  Is she some kind of hybrid feline like Merlitz?  Also, she doesn't seem to have a tail.  Is that intentional?

[WhiteFox]

Jade is a demon, so I've taken a few liberties with her appearance.

I completely forgot her tail, though. Gah.

As for GIMP, I'm using a Mac. The photoshop driver I'm using is called "CanoScan Gear CS 7.0.1x"

[WhiteFox]

Getting better. I need to work on my composition though.

03- Gut wrenching agony lands you in the dog house.
A lot of colors on Jade are different now. No reason for this storywise, I just needed to redesign her.

Still no tail. I'm not drawing it till I pencil more comics. As for spots, I have plans for those in the future.

As usual, comments appreciated.

[Edit: Wrong URL.]
[Edit the second: If anyone can tell me what kind of top I've put on Jade, lemme know. I need to look up a visual reference for it.]

[llearch n'n'daCorna]

halter top, I think. Or at least a variant thereof.

[Tapewolf]

The edges on the inking look a little bit rough, especially in the top-left pane, also the warp-aci in the lower-right pane seems to have some of its inking missing.  Was that intentional?

Apart from that and a couple of typos, very nice.  I particularly like the way the warp-aci is crawling out of the floor.

[WhiteFox]

That's... wierd. I don't know what happened to the lines on Wynk's head. The Vwmm is choppy because I decided to line it at the last second, and rushed it.

Panel two's inking is kind of rough because I had to do rework the lines several times for the downshot.

[WhiteFox]

'Nother page.
04- The mysterious arts of SAIA.

The perspective in panel one is all screwed up cause I couldn't draw my lines straight. I think I'm gripping my pen too tightly, hard habit to break. I didn't want to spend too much time drawing Theo's room, cause this is probably the only time we're going to see it. I like Wynk's tail in panel 1, tho. Which I forgot to draw in panel 2. I like Jade in panel 3, except for the face, which I hate. I like how the wall sconce-skulls came out, they're cool. So, once again, I like it and hate it. Wharg.

I need to slow down on these, I can tell I'm rushing them. I think half of how well these will come out is dependent on how much time I can spend on them. After a while, I just get tired of looking at it. Also, I need to browse though Blambot for fonts.

Anyway... comments appreciated.

[Tapewolf]

The link is still to comic 3.

Anyway, I rather liked the face - she looks all excited, which contrasts nicely when she's asking if he's study torture.  If there's anything wrong with her, I think it's that her neck is a bit too long.  Oh, and the ears seem a little off.

[llearch n'n'daCorna]

Not drawing the tail in panel 2 seems like "artistic licence" and deliberate, rather than accidental. I'd just go with it, myself. ;-]

However, you've also failed to draw a clan mark on his forehead. That, I think, is a slightly bigger flaw, since The Gospel According To Amber seems to suggest that Warp-Aci only show up in this dimension by being drawn here through a Cubi... and that such drawing process, in a way, creates the body they inhabit; hence the mark on their forehead...


Oh, yes. I fixed the link for you. Hope you don't mind.

[WhiteFox]

thanks for fixing the link.
Clan mark... right. I always seem to forget something.

Anyway, I rather liked the face - she looks all excited, which contrasts nicely when she's asking if he's study torture.

I was hoping that would come across.
Her neck is pretty long to begin with, and she's tilting her head back which makes the neck look longer. At least, she's supposed to be. That's why I don't like it.

[WhiteFox]

[Edit: When trying to change the name of the thread, to update the update date, I inadvertently hit the "Quote" button instead of Edit and reposted my first post]

[Tapewolf]

Does this series have a name?

[WhiteFox]

Haven't come up with a name yet. Thinking up a name may take longer than making the first 50 comics.

[WhiteFox]

Quickie one-shot comic. Started as a scribble in my book, and I couldn't resist uploading it.

In socialist Canadia, DDR playes YOU.

I've been curious about DDR since it showed up in the comic. If it weren't for DMFA, I dont' think I would have been as interested in trying it as I have been. Well, I picked up DDR: Hottest Party for the Wii (Or, WiiDR as I call it.) and it has wholly taken over all my free time. If I get 3 A's in a row on freestyle, it MAKES me play Super Samurai. 

[WhiteFox]

Sienna in IIRC(Paraphrased): Someone should draw a picture of me hitting Saist with a two-by-four.
Wooden plank justice!

I am constantly disappointed at furry artists inability to display the fury of an angered feline.

Also: Thanks to Turnsky and Robbie for helping me solve a problem with my tablet... however roundabout they were in doing so. 

[WhiteFox]

Dark Side of Furrae Comic 05... Is complete!

http://05- The Trick is to make it sound like you are not begging.

I HATE Theonor in panel two, and I must have redrawn him 3 times. Prof. Maltorius looks so good in the other panels that I couldn't stand to start over from scratch. Also, the shading is minimal because I just wanted it to be DONE. I think it came out wellthough.

I wish people would post here... I feel weird making three or four posts in a row.

[edit] URL, not IMG link. Gah.

[Tapewolf]

I HATE Theonor in panel two, and I must have redrawn him 3 times. Prof. Maltorius looks so good in the other panels that I couldn't stand to start over from scratch. Also, the shading is minimal because I just wanted it to be DONE. I think it came out wellthough.

Nice.  I actually found panel 2 rather endearing, although yes, the head is a little off compared to the final panel.

One thing you might want to bear in mind is that most 'Cubi in DMFA only seem to have one name.  It might be that they use their Clan as a surname, but other than that, they only seem to adopt one if they were born into Being society (e.g. Abel Rewanz, Daniel Ti'Fiona).

Granted we don't really have enough datapoints to be entirely sure, but as a rule of thumb, it seems to work.

[WhiteFox]

Mostly... big names are more intimidating.

I love how the robe suit looks. I forgot to mention that.

[WhiteFox]

More wacky chatroom hijinx.

Omnomnomnomnom...

Siirenia sez that's not what she meant by chewing on Gron's ear, which makes it even more funny.

[WhiteFox]

DSOF#06- I think he jinxed it.

Ugh. I've taken forever to make this one 'cause I'm going into an expiramental phase. If I don't post it, I'm just gonna keep tweaking and changing stuff. I've shot myself in the foot in a couple of places, like making the background, Theo's, and Unnamed Guy's fur all gray. Gah. I'm playing with hair coloring, and it looks much better at the high resolution version I was working on. I just want this one done with, though, so I'm posting it and moving on.

#7 in progress.

[Tapewolf]

Not bad, although a little short.  What kind of animal is the grey guy?

[WhiteFox]

Feline. Nothing fancy.

[WhiteFox]

DSOF#07-Re isn't too bright, really.

(Side note: Felix's real name is Feliciano. Every one at SAIA calls him Felix, though. Fel hates both names with a passion.)

[EDIT] Ré's redesign is inspired by the Axolotl. Google it if you don't know what one is.

DSOF #7 took so long to finish cause I was more interiested in working on this:

feliciano.jpg

A pic of my most recently introduced character. Now, it took so long cause I was messing around with new methods of coloring. I know you guys aren't the most talkative here, but I could *really* use some feed back here. Anything would be nice.

Before, as in DSOF #07 above, I'd make a layer for ink, color, and shadows. I'd put the shadow layer to 30-40% transparent, and paint away. In the pic of Feliciano here, I've got one layer for ink and one for color. The balls to the left are swatches I used to pick and paint colors. I should probably go to using two shades of dark. I also started using paths for filling in some of the shadows and highlights, especially the hair. The boots highlight were done using my tablet. Probably the first time I've made use of the pressure sensitivity.

All in all, I really like the pic.

[Tapewolf]

Nice.  The hair shading works nicely.  I'm not so sure about the facial shading on Theo in the mid frame, though.  By the way, what kind of an animal is Theo anyway?  He looks kind of like a hamster.

Should be interesting to see how it develops.

**EDIT**
That's "nicely" not "likely"

[WhiteFox]

Theonor is a rat.His ears give me a lot of trouble, as they're round from the front but triangular from the side. I get that mixed up a lot

As for the facial shading, I'm not to hot on it myself. I need to do some life studies on that.

Yesss, life studies make everything better, they do.

[WhiteFox]

Starting up on Dark Side of Furrae again. I built a quick-and-dirty site for navigating it.

Very quick. Posting the link here for your browsing pleasure and so I can show it to some friends IRL.

http://www.northernelectric.ca/~whitefox/comics/dmfa/dsof01.html

[llearch n'n'daCorna]

Were you planning on fixing the typos and spelling mistakes, or just not make them again?

[WhiteFox]

I'm thinking to keep the mistakes as mistakes. I like to see progress in my work.

If I were to put up a complete website and try to build my own fanbase, as opposed to showing the comic here only, I would probably do revisions of the earlier comics. But that would be a complete reworking.

The biggest comment I get is that the writing is weak. I'll probably be focusing on that.

[Tapewolf]

Interesting to see a strip halfway-through being coloured. There's something a little odd about the demon's mouth in the first frame, though... I can't quite put my finger on it.  Something to do with the lips/cheek being too thin, I think.

[WhiteFox]

It'll look better once I get the teeth and tongue in there.

Carp... I just realized I'm going to have to do a sheet like this: http://www.northernelectric.ca/~whitefox/images/dmfa/feliciano.jpg for everyone before I can finish coloring.

Edit: Very much the wrong link.