It's been so long since I've been here that I thought it might be better to start a new thread. (And my old writing would best be forgotten!) This is going to be fiction only, no poetry.
3/25/14: Night in Lindenton (https://www.weasyl.com/submission/539597/night-in-lindenton)
Keaton asked that I write her a short story in her verse featuring the psychopathic as-GAK! I mean wonderful Halloween and his lieutenant Zaell. Comments welcome here and at Weasyl.
Oh, so you wrote that! I read the thing this morning. It definitely had Sunblink written all over it :p
Huh. I feel I should point out, Weasyl won't let me read that unless I register an account. Just so you know...
Thoughts? What you liked the most/least? You always have a lot to say, so I want to hear what you think, Tape. :3
Quote from: Yugo on March 25, 2014, 12:32:24 PM
Thoughts? What you liked the most/least? You always have a lot to say, so I want to hear what you think, Tape. :3
I enjoyed it. It was well-written, dark but not overly so (with the possible exception of the description of the sacrifice).
[spoiler]I wasn't sure whether to be relieved or disappointed when the merc didn't kill him at the end. I mean, he is the protagonist but nasty enough that killing him off wouldn't have been uncalled for. It was an interesting moral dilemma.
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In a lot of ways it reminded me of my own ongoing story about Jakob and Keaton's first meeting. It captured the dark medieval feel quite well.
Except for the vinyl-bound book - that felt conspicuously out-of-place.
Something that merits further revision then. I'm glad you liked it so much.