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Title: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: Silver Pomeranian Genji on December 16, 2008, 03:08:02 AM
Tis my Winx Club story. (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4677781/1/Glitch_in_the_System)<-- 'Tis my Winx Club story. Three chapters and counting. If anybody has any feedback, I would be deeply grateful, and much thanks in advance.

EDIT: Link fixed.
Title: Re: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: Tapewolf on December 16, 2008, 06:29:50 PM
You might want to fix the link.

Apart from that, it does seem to rely rather heavily on the reader already knowing the scenario pretty well.  Since I don't, it's not making a great deal of sense, I'm afraid to say.
Title: Re: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: techmaster-glitch on December 16, 2008, 07:45:17 PM
IS THIS METAL ARMS: GLITCH IN THE SYSTEM? I DON'T KNOW, THE LINK EEZ BROOOOKEEENN!! D: D: D: D: D:
Title: Re: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: Tapewolf on December 16, 2008, 07:47:21 PM
Quote from: techmaster-glitch on December 16, 2008, 07:45:17 PM
IS THIS METAL ARMS: GLITCH IN THE SYSTEM? I DON'T KNOW, THE LINK EEZ BROOOOKEEENN!!
Just cut-and-paste it into the browser for now.  Either that or I'll fix it myself...
Title: Re: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: techmaster-glitch on December 16, 2008, 07:55:32 PM
Oh, it's not...I am filled with disappointment FOR LIFE :cry


Ok, serious now. I mirror Tapewolf's comment.
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In fact, it was here, or more specifically, at the park, that Bloom met Stella, and...well, you know the rest.
No we don't.
Title: Re: [Story] Glitch in the System
Post by: Silver Pomeranian Genji on December 18, 2008, 09:15:23 PM
Quote from: techmaster-glitch on December 16, 2008, 07:55:32 PM
Oh, it's not...I am filled with disappointment FOR LIFE :cry


Ok, serious now. I mirror Tapewolf's comment.
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In fact, it was here, or more specifically, at the park, that Bloom met Stella, and...well, you know the rest.
No we don't.

Sorry about the misleading title. I thought it'd be pun-worthy, considering who the main villain is and all. Anyway, the story is geared towards Winx Club viewers, in case I didn't say so in the original post, so again I apologize.