I'm working on my own song currently and would like any helpful comments you could make.
I found the key to the door of the stars in the sky// hidden deep in the pools of the orbs that's her eyes
and the path weaved a trail through the jewels of the air// and I followed my heart to my sweet lady fair
Through the danger and darkness I walked through the night//with my steel I fought to the gate of the light
In the silver moon light i found myself free//in the arm of my love ever more shall I be
Comments?
Just moving this to the Tower of Art...
Let it be known now that this is a work in progress and may change or things get added on to it.