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Title: 2017/01/13 [PF 456] Even zombies crawl out of their holes
Post by: James StarRunner on January 14, 2017, 02:08:20 PM
This is what I've been particularly eager for! I remember writing James' dialog back quite a long time ago now. Seems a little different from what I remembered, but still good to see. ^_^
Title: Re: 2017/01/13 [PF 456] Even zombies crawl out of their holes
Post by: Tapewolf on January 14, 2017, 02:53:43 PM
Quote from: James StarRunner on January 14, 2017, 02:08:20 PM
This is what I've been particularly eager for! I remember writing James' dialog back quite a long time ago now. Seems a little different from what I remembered, but still good to see. ^_^

The original version was taken direct from the original story:
"What am I, a fruit and veggie strainer?!  I don't 'leak' stuff!" the squirrel huffed. "I kept all your other 'dark secrets' for centuries! But since you are sorry, I guess that will have to do for now..."

...this didn't pass muster with my proof-reader, and they were right - James shifts from furious to forgiveness in under a second,  so it needed fixing.  A frustrating half-hour was spent trying to rewrite that last line so that I could publish the comic and go to bed.
Title: Re: 2017/01/13 [PF 456] Even zombies crawl out of their holes
Post by: James StarRunner on January 15, 2017, 12:02:52 AM
Good call